Writing

  Kanah’s Writing Learning story
The Problem:  
How do I retell a significant event so others can share my experience?
My recount: In the holidays
In the holidays me and my family went to Hastings it was so fun because we saw some wild animals. When we got there we went to my aunty’s house. Then we went Splash Planet it was so fun my nana had a swim cause she wanted some fun. My favorite was the big slide ‘woohoo’ with no roof and it had something for you to sit on like a donut haha. I also liked the go cart’s my cousin came first I came second my dad came last it was fun it’s like a family tradition we do this every Easter. Then we had a big as feed my aunty got her bbq and we made some lamb and beef  yummy yummy. Then we sleep until tomorrow zzzzzzzzzzzzzz after that we go to have a good breakfast then we came back home and had a rest and the next day was the first day of my new school.

By Elkanah
Success criteria: (highlight the success criteria your writing shows)
I can use-
  • A powerful hook to get the reader’s attention
  • Where, when and who in the introduction to set the scene
  • An introduction- middle- conclusion
  • The 5 W’s (where, when, why, who,  what, and why) and 1 H (how) to add detail
  • Dialogue to tell what happened
  • The past tense
  • Descriptive words to make the writing interesting
  • Precise words to let the reader know what exactly happened.
  • Connectives to make the  story flow from one group of ideas to another.
  • Punctuation to help the reader understand the ideas
  • Personal voice like I think….
My Learning:  (Choose 2 to write about)

  • I got better at managing  myself because my writing has been getting better.
  • It is hard to to add punctuation like commas and speech marks.


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